所以我们再来回头看刚才A同学的作文
Cambridge IELTS 7 Test 3 TASK 1
The percentage in average house prices in four countries increased over the years while Frankfurt decreased a little bit during this period about 1%. From 1990 to 1995, there were three countries have negative value in the average house price, and the least one was London about -7.5%. Tokyo was almost the same as it. The percentage in New York was around 3%. That in Frankfurt was more. What is more, the change in average house price in London was the most sharply, from -7.5% to 12%. New York also rose 10% during the years from 1990 to 2002. There was a small increase in Madrid and was around 2%. The value in average house price in Tokyo was still below zero was 5%.
1. 关键位置:首句尾句有错误
2. 错误频次:整段的语法错误共有6处,相对较多
3. 错误严重程度:主要是句子成分残缺的语法错误
所以这位同学如果想突破5.5, 在这些错误上要懂得归纳总结,并且下次写作时要格外注意类似错误和重点句子的检查。修改后的段落如下:
Cambridge IELTS 7 Test 3 TASK 1
The percentage in average house prices in four countries increased over the years while Frankfurt decreased a little bit during this period with about 1%. From 1990 to 1995, three countries experienced negative values in the average house price, and the least one was London, about -7.5%. Tokyo was almost the same as it. The percentage in New York was around 3%. That in Frankfurt was more. What is more, the change in average house price in London was the sharpest, from -7.5% to 12%. New York also rose by 10% during the years from 1990 to 2002. There was a small increase in Madrid, which was around 2%. The value in average house price in Tokyo was still below zero at 5%.
结构 & 内容
结构:
在保证语法和词汇较高的准确程度之后,要注重文章整体和每一段落的组织结构。如果说,一篇错误较少的文章可以让你突破5.5,那么加上结构清晰这一要素就可以让你稳在6了。 而关于雅思写作的结构,是千人千面,学生都有自己的想法,老师们也有各自的教法,所以,没有绝对的对与错。
内容:
另一点,就是关于TA/TR,也就是文章内部的“料”;如果说之前的语法词汇和结构像是一个人的穿搭和外貌,那TA/ TR就是这个人的内涵了。其实对于想要突破5.5,在内容上不用花费太多心思,只要描述基本正确,论述基本合理即可。但是在内容上想要达到高分,不是通过短时间突击可以轻易达到的。更多来说,是对于话题的理解程度,这个需要大量的素材积累和专业课程的辅助。所以最简单的方法还是通过清晰逻辑把自己想要表达的东西说清楚就好,以刚才同学B的作文为例,帮助他梳理一下这一段的写法: