学生A :
Cambridge IELTS 7 Test 3 TASK 1
The percentage in average house prices in four countries increased over the years while Frankfurt decreased a little bit during this period about 1%. From 1990 to 1995, there were three countries have negative value in the average house price, and the least one was London about -7.5%. Tokyo was almost the same as it. The percentage in New York was around 3%. That in Frankfurt was more. What is more, the change in average house price in London was the most sharply, from -7.5% to 12%. New York also rose 10% during the years from 1990 to 2002. There was a small increase in Madrid and was around 2%. The value in average house price in Tokyo was still below zero was 5%.
点评:首先这名同学在TA 和CC 上完成的都还不错,选取关键信息进行比较,并能有一定行文逻辑和运用一些衔接手段,能够达到6分的要求。但是文中标红的地方都是学生在语法和词汇上的知识型错误,虽然大致不影响理解,但是因为错误比较频繁出现,而且有些会产生歧义,所以该同学的语法和词汇的分数都有5分的可能性,所以最终的分数是5.5。
学生B:
Cambridge IELTS 11 Test 1 TASK 2
Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Building roads can help the development of economics in local area as it may cause the area to have trade with other cities more frequently because of the more convenient transportation. The easier to get to the area, the more people will come, and this can increase the probability for the travelling industry. Many tourists would visit here and this also bring more chances for setting up more stores to gain money. For government, they can get more tax from the railway construction.
点评:这是一名同学写多修建公路好处的一段论证。首先不同于刚才的TASK 1, 这名同学的语法没有明显错误,同时句式也是简单与复杂句结合,所以语法得到6分是没有问题的;同时,也能使用充足的词汇,即使economics出现明显错误,应该改为economy,但不大影响理解。此段最大的问题在于整段的逻辑不是很清楚,首句说建造公路可以通过其他地方贸易来发展经济,之后就说到了发展旅游业,最后又说到了增加税收,论证缺乏一定的逻辑性和深入性。同时,也缺少一定的衔接手段。所以这一段展示出学生的CC较为薄弱,TR在一定程度上也有所影响,所以最终在这两项的得分都有5的可能性,最终得分也是5.5。
所以从这两名同学的实例中可以看出,达到5.5分同学在英语基础上,是没有太大的问题的,在词汇储备上也有一定量的积累。但他们往往是在四项评分标准中的一项或者两项有较为弱势的方面,通常来说TA/TR 和CC 相连,LR和GRA相连。所以万年5.5的同学此处可以自省一下,看看自己到底是哪一项拖了成绩的后腿。