科技类:
Nowadays, people perform their everyday tasks, such as banking, shopping as well as business transactions, without the need of meeting other people face to face. What are the possible effects of the phenomenon on the individual and the society as a whole? 现在很多人可以通过网络做很多事情,例如购物和交易,这对于个人和社会的影响是什么?
薛鹏点评:本文按照题目指令写作,只需谈及网络交易对于个人和社会的利弊影响,无需重点提出解决策略,可选择在尾段简单提及。
作家立场:本文将会分析网络交易对于个人和社会的影响。
新东方网薛鹏思路拓展:
网络购物对于个人影响:
1. 利好的方面:给人们的购物带来了便利,具体而言,网络购物可克服地理的障碍,节省了大量的时间,同时,网络购物价格低廉,选择丰富。
2. 不利的方面:对于女性消费者而言,因为网络商品价格低廉,所以,很多人在打折期间囤积商品,这样,惯性消费反而会增加经济负担。
网络购物对于社会影响:
1. 利好的方面:网络交易平台的出现在一定程度解决了就业,很多年轻人可以开网店赚钱,这种工作方式时间灵活,
2. 不利的方面:网络商品质量没有保障,消费者容易买到假货,经济受损。新形态的网络犯罪成为社会问题,例如,网络购物过程中,很多不法分子传播病毒,窃取密码,侵犯隐私,非法牟利。
新东方网薛鹏原创雅思写作语料库:
1. The invention and popularity of the computer has profoundly revolutionized modern people’s option of consumption 互计算机的发明和普及深刻地改变了人们的购物选择。
解析:revolutionize v极大改变
2. On-line shopping has been boosting like the mushrooms after spring rains. 网络购物就像是雨后春笋般不断地增长。
3. People have been debating the pros of cons of cyber business transaction without reaching any definite agreement. 人们在思考网络交易的利弊,没有达成共识。
4. In this essay,I will endeavor to examine the impacts brought about by this on-line business traction both on individual consumers and the society. 本文中,我将努力探究下网络交易带来的个人和社会影响。
解析:endeavor to do sth v 努力做……
5. The merits of on-line shopping and on-line business prevail over its possible demerits. 网络购物和网络交易的利大于弊。
解析:prevail over v 远远超过
6. In comparison with the traditional shopping, the cyber shopping enjoys its unique advantages , which quite fit the young consumers’ taste. It is no necessary for consumers to take trouble to go outside, just click their mouse, the goods will be delivered to them. 和传统的购物相比,网络购物有其独特的优势,这更符合年轻消费者的口味。消费者不需要外出,只需点击一下鼠标,商品就会送到他们手中。
7. Many youngsters like to spend their hardly earned money on their favorite goods 许多年轻人喜欢把辛苦赚到的钱花在他们喜欢的商品上。
8. Problems, however, inevitably ensue 然而,问题随之而来。
解析:ensue v跟着发生
9. Excessive on-line consumption will impose much pressure upon some unwise consumers economically. 过度的网络消费对于非理性消费者施加了经济压力。
10. Some young ladies are addicted to cyber consumption out of the reason of seizing the opportunities of discount 出于抓住打折的机会的目的,很多年前女孩网络购物上瘾。
11. Even worse,on-line consumption fraud has been agonizing many on-line shoppers 更加糟糕的是,在线的消费欺诈行为正在困扰很多在线买家。
解析:agonize v使痛苦
12. It is highly possible that consumers might be fooled into buying fake or illegal products. 消费者很有可能被欺骗购买虚假的非法的商品。
13. Many on-line advertisements are full of flowery phrases and empty promises 很多的在线广告充满了花哨的宣传语以及空洞的承诺。
14. Some law-breakers draw on the Internet to deliver the bait or disseminate virus in order to steal the password and reap fabulous profits illegally.一些不法分子利用互联网发送诱饵,传播病毒,窃取密码,非法牟利。
解析:draw on the Internet v利用互联网
解析:reap fabulous profits illegally v非法牟利
15. On-line business transaction is a two-edged weapon which can be used equally for good or evil. 网络交易是一把双刃刀,有利有弊。
16. What is of the utmost importance is to make use of its merits and be careful about its demerits. 重要的是,我们要利用其利好及当心其弊端。
17. It is the duty of every consumer to raise the awareness of wise buying. 消费者应该提高理性消费意识。
18. The government should be urged to strengthen the censorship of on-line advertisement and severely penalize those illegal sellers. 政府应该被督促去加强对于网络广告的审查,处罚非法卖家。
解析:The government should be urged to do sth 政府应该被督促去做……
薛鹏全篇点评:小鹏哥原创语料库为拓展思路,抛砖引玉,组合即为完美范文,但是,为避免雷同,建议童鞋思考个性论据和例证,打造个性范文。
作者介绍:
薛鹏(@雅思小鹏哥), 高中时代出版诗文集《选择坚强》,每年创作20万字原创语料库以及范文。吉林大学外国语言学及应用语言学硕士。17年英语教学经验 (7年新东方雅思托福SAT教学经历),前长春新东方功勋教师,多次培训出雅思和托福高分学员(雅思写作7.5分,托福写作29分)。
爱生活,爱运动,爱音乐电影,爱旅行美食,爱读书摄影,更爱英语教学。20岁登上英语讲台,主讲英语万词速记课程。熟悉GRE、TOEFL、SAT、TEM、CET等各级别词汇教学。
大一时即在报刊杂志上主持“英语学习系列谈”以及“薛鹏教你学单词”等专栏。2006年获得“外研社/朗文杯”新概念背诵大赛吉林省赛区大学成人组冠军,全国总决赛大学成人组二等奖。
对于各类写作课程有精深研究,授课方式行云流水,妙语连珠,知识底蕴深厚,对学员极具有启迪性和激励性。
教学理念:Education is not the filling of a pail but the lighting of a fire.(教育不是注满一桶水,而是点燃一把火)
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