学生B:

　　Cambridge IELTS 11 Test 1 TASK 2

　　Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

　　Building roads can help the development of economics in local area as it may cause the area to have trade with other cities more frequently because of the more convenient transportation. The easier to get to the area, the more people will come, and this can increase the probability for the travelling industry. Many tourists would visit here and this also bring more chances for setting up more stores to gain money. For government, they can get more tax from the railway construction.

　　点评：这名同学在TR上的观点和论证是有的，但是因为逻辑有些不清楚导致论述看起来不够有力，所以接下来我们把他的文章进行了修改，通过简明化中心句，明晰1. 增加贸易量 2. 旅游业发展 来论述多修路的好处：

　　Building roads can help the development of local economy. Initially, when more roads are constructed, the transport efficiency of this area might be greatly improved. In this way, the trade volume can be enlarged which contributes to more earnings. In addition, roads can promote tourism by connecting different regions. With easier access to the resorts, tourists will be more willing to depart and consume, by which the local government and companies can expect more income.

　　所以，简单总结一下，对于想要突破5.5分的烤鸭，可以从三个方面依次排查：

　　1. 词汇语法准确性

　　2. 全文和段落逻辑结构

　　3. 内容合理性

　　如果在这三个方面都没有太多(大)纰漏，那么分数还是会有保证的，但最关键的是三方面要同时达到哦!

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